Paper 1 was the paper that needed the most revision. In the beginning, my paper was not long enough and had multiple local revisions that needed to be made. There were also areas that did not go into enough detail that I needed to elaborate more on. There was a lot wrong with this essay and I was thankful for the chance to revise it. The first thing I did in my revision process was go through and correct all of the local revision mistakes. Fixing those mistakes eliminated an unnecessary distraction while editing the rest of my paper. The next thing I did was look for areas where I could bring in examples to help me make my ideas clearer. I pulled evidence both from the readings and real life historical and current examples.
